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Sara da Encarnação's avatar

so NICE!!!!!! what an amazing photo, and lyricism.

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you, Sara. That means so much! 🖤

The stranger's avatar

Absolutely love this one.

You spoke of what many of us couldn't find the right words to describe.

Thank you! ❤️

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you so much for reading and sharing. I am happy it resonated with you. I appreciate you. 🖤

AsukaHotaru's avatar

Before the memory bleeds into bass... Something about sound turning traitor that way feels too close to the skin...

Jacqueline's avatar

Yes, exactly. That is one of my favorite lines, too. Music has so much power. I am happy that came through in the piece. 🖤 Thank you for reading.

Nimila the Inferno's avatar

I loved this one! And I just found out that you sing? I love that you are experimenting, that's what we are here for 😍 Would you also consider audios or songs here? You have my full support. Ps: the note is too accurate. Be careful what you share with whom...

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you! I am so glad enjoyed it. I write song lyrics a lot so it’s been fun putting that practice into poetry. I don’t really have a set genre or style with writing so you never know what you will get with me. 🙃 I hadn’t really thought of doing audio here but it could be fun. 🖤 I appreciate your support so much.

LonelyRobotTheme V2.0's avatar

Wow!!! This is so so great, I love the rhythm of the whole things! And now I want to hear you sing too! So fantastic 🖤🖤🖤

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you so much! I am glad you could feel the rhythm through the page. You are so kind. 🖤

LonelyRobotTheme V2.0's avatar

No worries! I adore your work so much 💕

B Philippe's avatar

Lovely piece!

“If I share the music, I give them the key,

To rewrite the parts that belonged to me” ~ ❤️

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to comment. I appreciate you. ♡

Damien's avatar

Wonderful to hear you’re singing and coming up with melodies! I fell into this so easily and followed along with your rhythm. Beautiful!!

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you so much, Damien. That means so much to me. 🖤 I am happy you felt it.

Dante's avatar

Your closing lines are so good they tingled my spine...

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you so much. I actually wrote those lines first when this idea came to me. I’m glad you felt them too.

Alexandra Kamberos's avatar

Love ♥️

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you! I gave you photo credit at the end there. 🖤

Alexandra Kamberos's avatar

I saw, haha! Such a fun night! ♥️

The Quantum Quill's avatar

I remember reading this a month ago and enjoying it but the meaning it holds now has changed (in a good way). Thank you for sharing your lyrical prose and song with me and with others.

💛🩵

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you so much for reading it again. It is always nice when the experience unfolds in new ways over time.

Ethereal Twilight Poetry's avatar

Wonderful !! I really like this one! 😍

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you so much. 🖤🎶 Appreciate you!

Brooklyn Crane's avatar

Oh, wow! 😭 This is exactly what it feels like and what I thought of when I wrote my piece. Sharing music really is ceding control over your mind.

The couplets make it so lyrical, too! And now I’m more than certain that you’ve got a melody for this poem.

Jacqueline's avatar

Exactly! Thank you so much for reading. I definitely do have a melody in mind. I don’t always rhyme but this one demanded to be lyrical.

Aaliya's avatar

Wow, the emotions in this are so raw and powerful. The way you describe the transformation of music and memories is truly moving. What a splendid piece .

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you, Aaliya. I am so happy you connected with it. I appreciate you reading and commenting. ♡