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HVR - James's avatar

That was a trip. Please write for Black Mirror.

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you. That is some high praise. The most unsettling stories are usually rooted in the truth.

Dante's avatar

This is fabulous. Rod Serling would have been SO pleased to introduce this to the audience.

Renee Cappetta's avatar

Chilling and relevant. Love the zipper metaphor.

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you so much for reading.

Words about things and stuff's avatar

Great story. Utterly disturbing, but great. Thank you.

Jacqueline's avatar

Thank you for reading! Sorry to disturb 🙃

Words about things and stuff's avatar

Eh. Sometimes being disturbed is the best thing for us!

The Quantum Quill's avatar

Wonderfully and terrifyingly evocative.

The music nails it.

I don’t think I’ve ever read a mix of 1940s vintage body horror.

Jacqueline's avatar

I am so glad you liked it! I always have music in mind when I write the creepy ones. 🖤

Mathew C. Bryant • Horror Poet's avatar

This was phenomenal. The tension tightening all the way to the inevitable ending was handled so well.

Jacqueline's avatar

Wow. Thank you , Mat. That means so much!

Raven Noble's avatar

The full body chill of “cravat” where there was none is so miserably funny

Jacqueline's avatar

Haha, I am so glad! I rewrote that part a few times but stuck with the original idea. Something kept me going back to the cravat.

Raven Noble's avatar

Blue collar vs the tightest of white collars